Stitch V Louis

Vision: The golden rule is "show don't tell." Sometimes dialogue is required for the point to get across, but if you can it is essential to have the picture be self explanatory. If the conflict in this picture is over Dobie (you), then that begs the question--where is Dobie? Nevertheless, the scene presently gets the point across in a subtle way with its words and its gestures. The gestures themselves are highly entertaining and tell us more clearly than exclamation marks that the characters are saying "I am angry!"

Originality: Let's just say if Dobie or at least one original character of yours was in the picture, it would have scored a few more points in this category. The scenario isn't too original to begin with either (two jealous characters fighting over someone). It gets a marginal point for being a cross-over.

Technique: You are improving at the shading, sport, and that's fantastic. However, there are still some things you need to work on with the shading; the element of consistency between one shadow and another is absolutely important to creating immersion.
One specific thing I should point out is the metal spheres on the gate. Metal shines, does it not? Try giving it a splash of white or bright yellow opposite to the shaded sides.
I am not going to bring the rest of the scenery up, since it corresponds with your shading and highlight ability. As you improve at these, you may find your "technique" score getting higher from this critic.

Impact: The conflict between big and small creates a highly humorous contrast that has been been applied in comical medias since Laurel and Hardy. Ergo, while not the most original idea, I am very entertained by this scenario. Not only that, but it makes the viewers eager to see how fight between these two would go. The expressions are also great.

Overall: Don't let the originality score get you down, it's not a big deal in a picture like this. Consider the good aspects that make it a creative piece (it doesn't need to be original to be creative). This is by no means a bad picture. In fact, it's a very nice picture and you should be proud of your efforts. Once you get the hang of shading we will move onto talking about improving your scenery.